Why do we do the things we do? by rent_a

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Submission Name: Why do we do the things we do? dots

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Author:	rent_a_fairy
ASL Info:	17/F/MO
Elite Ratio:	6.6 - 31/21/13
Words:	139

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	141
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	949

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Why do we do the things we do? dots

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I stand before you--
Wondering
If it meant anything at all
If I--
Mean anything.

Hiding beneath the blankets and sheets
Where the tears fall once again,
My blood runs cold.

I go on…
Stretching my arms,
As far as they go
To get a firm grip--
I’m barely there.

Please let me
Shut my eyes tightly and
Fall asleep with courage
To face myself in my dreams.

Putting on the line--
My life and yours,
For someone who should mean everything--

I ripped my mind to shreds
Searching for the answer
For right and wrong.

I can hardly move.
And-
I’m scared to admit
How much I need you--

You
Poured me all out-
But if you
Stand on the outside…
If you knock
I will let you in.

Submitted on 2006-05-27 17:33:24 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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||| Comments |||
This is a really nice poem. I like the flow, and uneven verses. Sort of a meld of two structures. the only thing I can even think of that sticks out to me are the lines:

Shut my eyes tightly and
Fall asleep with courage

The 'and' at the end of the line throws me a little, and I had to read it twice to see what you were going for. Normally you see it put at the beginning of the next line, but I think it is a good twist from the ordinary.

As for the message of the poem, I find it very touching. It's like you're saying ot this person, even though they (perhaps not knowing it) may have hurt you somehow, you still care about them, and will give them your forgiveness if they ask for it. ((At least, that's what I get from it.))

Again, I really enjoyed reading this. I hope to read some more of your work in the future.

With Love,
Sara
| Posted on 2006-05-27 00:00:00 | by saramaple | [ Reply to This ]

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