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    dots Submission Name: Werewolf Songdots

    Author: Colten
    ASL Info:    19/Man?lol/U of I
    Elite Ratio:    3.05 - 62/99/43
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       Just a creepy poem.

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    dotsWerewolf Songdots

    "Stagnant air flows around,
    The fetid breath unbound,
    From the werewolf, watching, waiting."

    The children sing...

    "Crimson eyes peirce the night,
    All is calm within the fright,
    From the werewolf, lusting, hating."

    The children sing...

    "Fury lashes from his claws,
    Opening wide his fabled jaws,
    From the werewolf, no-longer, waiting."

    The children cry...

    "Brittle bones shatter and break,
    Death trailing in his wake,
    From the werewolf, always, hating."

    And God will cry...
    And God will cry...

    "The Children Die!"

    Submitted on 2006-05-27 21:02:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Even though it may be creepy, I still enjoyed it. It shows the nature of something we don't want to think about, and I always enjoy reading those kind of poems, so yours is a treasure to me. I liked the way you repeated waiting and hating, it seemed to fit very well. i can't say I have a favourite stanza, as all of it is pretty good in my opinion.
    Great job!
    Take Care,
    | Posted on 2006-05-28 00:00:00 | by Natalia Petro | [ Reply to This ]
      Colten, killing children now? I don't know why but for some reason I always sympatize with werewolves, they are but victims of their own wretched reality. I see them as more human somehow, more reasoned. Have you ever read the book Blood or Chocolate by Klause? That is more how I see them. But that is just me who is weird enough to find good in a transgenic fictional creature. Anyway, good poem.
    | Posted on 2006-05-27 00:00:00 | by jennah | [ Reply to This ]

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