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    dots Submission Name: If no one was watching...dots
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    Author: jennah
    ASL Info:    19/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    4.07 - 101/73/22
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 713
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 668



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       Okay, I confess that I wrote this after seeing X3 and thinking about what I would do if I had the power to do anything, if I was faced with the ultimate choice of right vs. wrong.


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    If there were no consequences,
    what would you do?
    If no one was watching,
    would you still be you?

    If you could just reach out
    and take what you need,
    would you stick to your guns
    or give in to greed?

    Would your morals still stand,
    would your defenses fall?
    Would you fight for the right
    or heed corruption's call?

    If given a choice
    between evil and good,
    do you have what it takes
    to make yourself understood?

    Decide for yourself
    how much power you hold,
    so when the choice beckons
    you can be bold.




    Submitted on 2006-05-27 23:41:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Jenna, that is so you to write a poem bout X3. I love you (in a totally friendly way)! yeah I like this poem tis well done-specially the rhyming, which is hard to do. ne way, yeah that's all i have to say, adios!
    | Posted on 2006-05-31 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      I would more than likely take advantage of there being no consequences. And I would probably be corrupted and turn into a bad guy only to come to terms with myself when everything is too late. However, I would like to label myself as chaoticaly neutral. Fits my personality. By the way, i loved the poem.

    Colten
    | Posted on 2006-05-29 00:00:00 | by Colten | [ Reply to This ]
      This is awesome, and I have to agree with it. I also have to say that it's pretty fitting after watching X-3. I saw the movie the day it came out and I was questioning the same thing. You missed a whole car ride of "I'd blow this up, and punish this person, or save the world." Yes, it was quite interesting...
    Cheers,
    ~Sephe~
    | Posted on 2006-05-28 00:00:00 | by Persephone | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it.
    it's very encouraging and makes you question yourself...
    it kind of reminds me of the cliché' "reputation is what others see, but character is who you are"

    nice work
    cool picture by the way did you draw that? it's sweet

    -Lindsey
    | Posted on 2006-05-28 00:00:00 | by LindsUncensored | [ Reply to This ]
      I didn't like this poem. Idk sorry, im just being honest. The topic is a common one, yet rhyming is hard to do so that was well done. I used to write all in rhyme, but to me it sometimes sounds a bit childish. I love the picture, its beautiful..you should write a poem about it.

    _Peace out girl scout.
    | Posted on 2006-05-28 00:00:00 | by brokensmile | [ Reply to This ]


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