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    dots Submission Name: A Girl who's too sad to give a Fuck.dots

    Author: brokensmile
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 241/326/148
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
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       I stole my title from Connor Oberst.
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    dotsA Girl who's too sad to give a Fuck.dots

    I'll stay up with blue light
    Hugging your words to my chest
    Trying to clean up more
    Than red champagne on the floor.

    Who knew that thoughts could be numbered
    This hour, This minute
    Reserved for pain, or perhaps redeement
    But who am I to judge-
    What is too late or too early
    For creeping beneath what will eventually be

    I cannot remember a time
    when I could pull my hair away
    to distangle my face
    from its fear of being seen
    I cannot remember a time
    When I was someone else's
    Hand or lips or re-occuring taste
    All I remember, Is all that I am
    An occupied space,
    Like a lonely girl
    Emptier than the one before her.

    Submitted on 2006-05-28 00:29:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I got out of this poem that you feel empty, and, as the title says, sad. I could understand that much. But I was left wondering why. I didn't really understand what left you feeling this way. I supose that could be a good thing, because I was left to think about it for myself.

    I really liked the first stanza. It had some good imagery. I don't know, i just really liked how you wrote those 4 lines. Overall, this was a good write.
    | Posted on 2006-05-29 00:00:00 | by Dylan fan | [ Reply to This ]

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