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~old times~

Author: Je Vous Aime
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Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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memories don't always last forever...

~old times~

they were times of happiness
of grief
of envy
they were the best times
of my life
but my memories are dimming
the ones I thought would last forever
are disintegrating
into the air so thin
into the air
that gives life
or so we thought

Submitted on 2006-05-28 02:30:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  omg i feel ur pain mannn
yooo its like fadeing and it suxxx majorly
yoooo peace out suckahhh

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| Posted on 2006-06-01 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
  This was short but sweet. You chose your words well. I could relate to this, and so I liked it a lot. It was sad yet enjoyable. The flow was good. I think that all good memories will last forever and some bad ones. We'll just have to wait and see. Thanks for sharing this,

| Posted on 2006-06-01 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
  That's very deep, but I like it. I can very well relate to what you wrote. Good overall job though man, the words flowed.
| Posted on 2006-05-29 00:00:00 | by XpLiCiTKRiSiS | [ Reply to This ]
  it made me feel depressed,, but i enjoyed it
| Posted on 2006-05-28 00:00:00 | by Life in Pieces | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this writing style it flows really well each word has so much meaning.
Keep it up!
| Posted on 2006-05-29 00:00:00 | by snow | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow that is so true man
Well I liked the write it was cool
Now I commented on your poems lol

| Posted on 2006-07-01 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]

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