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    dots Submission Name: trigger happydots
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    Author: unknown soldier
    ASL Info:    17/kenner, La (N.O)
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 1348/1346/203
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 898
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1320



    Description:
       this is just about shooting people. i know i'm not a gangster and i don't shoot people. i just felt like writing about it. i think part of it's kinda funny


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    dotstrigger happydots
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    This war is galactic, fuck tactics
    Roll down your block straight busting automatics
    Iím sporadic
    Hands itching like crack addicts
    This is my bad habit
    Bust nine millimeter heaters at teachers and preachers
    With guns bigger than cousin Skeeter
    Cause more damage than Katrina and Rita
    Your momís dead so youíll be happy to meet her
    If life was a dream
    Then I wouldnít be a killing machine with six M16s
    Shooting through sixteen mixed teens
    Watch their eyes glaze over like Krisp Kremes
    Assist fiends with schemes of murdering Billie Jean
    Make you inhale hollow tips
    The same way Lilí Kim swallows dick
    You suck, swallow, spit as I empty clips
    Thereís a lot you can tempt me with
    But beware the recoil cuz these arenít empty threats
    Make you hit the ground like empty shell cases
    Wanna give twelve gauges to all ages
    Maul sages till they lock us up like animals in tall cages
    You can bet with your life
    This isnít Las Vegas
    Bust shots from twin glocks
    As the record, spins, stops and Iím a hit the block while itís hot
    Iím coming packed, hoping these vendettas never end
    Me and my two berettas, a life enderís best friend




    Submitted on 2006-05-28 12:16:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yo man u had me laughing when u were all yea this is just about shooting ppl lol. but yea this isn't how u normally write and it was kinda funny...but that's just me. But yea even if it is gansta rap keep the rhymes comming

    DePoetry
    | Posted on 2006-05-28 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
      hey babe! this was TOTALLY COMPLETLY diffrent from wat troy normally writes! talkin about shoting ppl and [censored]! dumbass!! good job though!
    ~akaila~
    U DONT HAV DA GUTS 2 SHOOT NOBODY GET DA [censored] OUTTA HERE!! love ya though!
    | Posted on 2006-05-28 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I felt that this would be better if the rhyming pattern was constant, but overall, this was pretty good. This was funny in a weirdly different way. I liked the content and the flow of this one. Thanks for the laugh

    Abbas
    | Posted on 2006-05-28 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Good flow, what's new there I don't think I've ever read one of urs that didn't have a good flow to it, haha Troy I can't imagine you would kill someone even if you had to but ur right I got a good laugh outta this one .
    peace
    | Posted on 2006-05-28 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      hey bubz,
    flow was tight, nice rhyming too, i used to know a few g's to them shooting came natural, thier targets were never kids tho, but yeah nice write,
    keep em cummin
    kyrenia
    | Posted on 2006-05-28 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      on the real, that [censored] was fya. i think ur [censored] gets better as you find that there's fewer words you can use cuz you've already written so much. omg, our team is so strong. me n my boy pat did some dirt in chalmette. bombed a [censored] warehouse, 13 foot scale like it was nothing. graffiti is beautiful. holla back for that collabo.
    | Posted on 2006-06-04 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
      u a fag real [censored]
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by heavy knowledge | [ Reply to This ]
      You had a great flow and the wording was good, but somehow it did not seem like you and it did not have your usual touch I've come to know with your work. But I'm glad to see you expand your topics. Something was missing from this...I can't place my finger on it now. Overall, good work.

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-06-16 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      damn man that [censored] was hot... I ain't neva read nothin like that from you.... you neva wrtie gangsta, man you do it well. this is definetly a favorite...

    deuce up
    jsells
    | Posted on 2006-06-22 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]


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