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    dots Submission Name: The Believable Dreamdots

    Author: MMISS
    Elite Ratio:    2.68 - 503/492/149
    Words: 242
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Believable Dreamdots

    I awoke last night to realize
    I had to face the judge
    I had to answer charges that I knew I was guilty of

    Walking in the courtroom
    I trembled in such fear
    Knowing I was guilty, knowing what was ahead
    As I stood before the Judge
    I noticed how small I seemed
    My sins were as filthy rags
    Compared to His robe so pure and clean

    And He said
    Well I've searched thru this book of life,child
    And I cant seem to find your name
    So you've given Me no choice
    I've got to put you down, it seems
    You know, if you had only listened
    To what I had to say
    I would have set you free
    But I'm sorry now,this isn't the case

    So He cast me out of the courtroom and thru me in the pit
    No longer would I see the light, only darkness,pain and fear
    I witnessed teeth nashing , fire and moaning
    Like human eyes have never seen
    I even saw loved ones that I knew
    And tears that never ceased
    Then I knew my fate was sealed
    Oh I couldn't turn back now
    All because .....

    But I awoke again and realized
    It all was just a dream
    And praise God
    praise God, praise God
    He gave me one more chance
    And now....

    Submitted on 2006-05-28 12:29:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      woo...this one gave me chills....it's a scary thought, huh? We definitly gotta keep straight...even though I do believe with all my heart...I don't even live like I should...I hate thinking about going to hell though...I can't imagine it...>.<
    | Posted on 2006-05-30 00:00:00 | by Raindrops | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey....interesting......this had me hanging on till the end
    I loved the ending .......
    Its good to hear it had a happy ending cause now you are the believer brill
    started off like oh no shes doomed haha
    and yeah....strong stuff
    me likey a lot
    God Bless
    Love Nadine
    | Posted on 2006-05-28 00:00:00 | by lostspirit | [ Reply to This ]
      Some dreams do come true. I hope this one for you does not.

    Judgement day awaits us all somewhere down the line.

    Very creative, and described really well. A good write that I enjoyed reading.

    | Posted on 2006-05-28 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      I think it flowed beautifuly and it had strong images attached to almost every line. I really liked how the beginning started in something familiar and moved into the spiritual.
    | Posted on 2006-07-16 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]

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