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    dots Submission Name: Your Songdots

    Author: redthewitch
    ASL Info:    36/f/tiny rural village
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 267/175/26
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Something I wrote a few years ago, undated for some reason. I was going through my old poetry notebooks yesterday, trying to condense anything I thought was decent.

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    dotsYour Songdots

    Sing to me
    your lullaby
    of shattered hearts and wasted tears
    of pain and anger
    hopes and fears
    Sing to me
    your lullaby
    of hopeless thoughts
    and silent screams
    love and loss
    and broken dreams
    Sing to me
    your lullaby
    soon the tears start falling
    with every melancholy note
    and sadness comes calling
    to claim your battered heart

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      It is sad and beautiful at the same time.
    if this is what you write when your depressed
    Then you have an art of expression in you depression. Your style reminds of a poet
    named Niki Giovanni. You may want to look her up. But any way Nice write.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2007-08-30 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I would never sing to any child - this could be a sad experience. Well, it's a sad piece, but still very, very beautiful... sensual. I like it. You feel the melody of lullbies, don't you?
    | Posted on 2004-05-12 00:00:00 | by Nightraven | [ Reply to This ]

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