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    dots Submission Name: The Diamonddots
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    Author: brokenroses
    ASL Info:    17/m/indiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 191/192/62
    Words: 341
    Class/Type: Story/Passion
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    Bytes: 1951



    Description:
       just an old familiar pain with a new outlook.


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    dotsThe Diamonddots
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         I wandered some valley deep in the mountains that surround my every thought. The purple on the tops of the tremendous mountains teemed with some sad loneliness. The tops of the trees adorning the crown of those melancholy mountains were like some green blanket warming the stones so carefully stacked. The hand of God, Himself, seemed to descend upon those hills and present a joy unknown deep within their hearts.
         My heart writhed and wrenched at them for I could feel the emanating warmth of their sadness. As I gathered my thoughts deep within that gorge, I found some lonely piece of coal beneath the vines that covered every inch of the ground. This was no ordinary rock. The sparkle and shine screaming from beneath the black rock caught my eye and soon captivated my cluttered mind. My thoughts clouded and my vision blurred, I was soon obsessed with this worthless heap of nothing.
         There was a diamond deep within the dreary ore, but I had no knowlege to make it shine. I fell deeper into depression as I felt the hopelessness of the joy deep within. This diamond was the reason behind my every thought, but somehow I could never give to it the full potential it so solidly deserved. My selfishness was deep, and I felt no remorse for keeping the joy to myself. Everything charming disappeared as I worked to keep the coal to myself.
         I must share this happiness with the world, but O God, I don't know how. How could I ever part with the one piece of nothing that has brought me such joy? How could I ever give away that diamond? I must, but I cannot. My diamond aches to become some ring or some shiny necklace. To hold that coal would only be selfish. I must give up, but I must not forget. I will never forget, for that diamond is within my heart.




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