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    dots Submission Name: Sleepless Nightdots
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    Author: MaeBirdie
    ASL Info:    17/female/US
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 59/51/30
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 115
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 744



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       This _was_ going to be very different.
    That didn't happen.

    ~Birdie~


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    dotsSleepless Nightdots
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          Ladies and gentlemen, there is nothing more disturbing than seeing your thirteen-year-old sister sunbathing in a tankini by the river and being given appraising glances by partying college students.
          Ladies and gentlemen, there is something wrong with the world when the teenager drives more cautiously than her parents.
          Ladies and gentlemen, if it is not possible to admire a dog without getting flicked off by the girl sitting next to it, what does this say about the state of the world?
    indent. Ladies and gentlemen, what would you say is the lesson in all of this?

    Don't go to the river.





    Submitted on 2006-05-29 13:15:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      haha, I liked this. Kind of a satire about the downfall of society, I think. The "Ladies and Gentlemen" at the beginning of each paragraph made it seems like an audience-like setting instead of a one-on-one type story. This kind of looks like a rant to me, but could very well fit under a story, or random thoughts. I believe in what you're saying, but I like society just as corrupt as it is. If only because it makes things fun.
    Wishing for more
    ~Brian
    | Posted on 2006-06-02 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this, and i'm going to try and decipher why. because considering how simple and straightforward it is, it does not seem like something i would normally like, but i did anyway. i liked the ending. and how it just suggestests ignoring what is wrong with the world, which is something that most people do, which is really just another thing that's wrong with the world. so prehaps you are just continueing the list in the end, and not really making a suggestion at all. it's a sacastic approach, which i also like. sarcastic, but still true nonetheless.

    peace.
    meredith.
    | Posted on 2006-05-31 00:00:00 | by art_is_hard | [ Reply to This ]



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