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    dots Submission Name: Karmadots
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    Author: forestspirit
    ASL Info:    21/m/inside
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 58/45/27
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Haiku/Serious
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    dotsKarmadots
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    slapstick! against the wall
    butt of the joke
    face first! on to the floor




    Submitted on 2006-05-29 13:38:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well, first i must confess that i dont a great deal about haiku. Except that it has to be written with a certain amount of syllables in each line and with 3 lines in all. This piece in particular surely has an unusual feel to it. Exclaiming, strong, ubrupt. Similar to what happens with slapstick, right? But if thats about humour on stage, then how is it tied with karma? "May be its because the bad guys always get their butts kicked...":-}
    That, in overall, is my impression. :-)
    Best of luck in writing to you!
    ~Dejfruit
    | Posted on 2006-05-29 00:00:00 | by Ms. DejFruit | [ Reply to This ]


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