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Author: Gmann
ASL Info:    19/M/WA
Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 98 /125 /73
Words: 373
Class/Type: Rant /Depressed
Total Views: 878
Average Vote:    4.0000
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Why do you break my heart over and over again
how can you do this to me
and not even see the dissapointment you cause
when I'm alone why do I feel so lost?
I like you, hell, I may love you
but the bonds that once so tightly teathered us together
are slowly being severed.
Do you even hear me when I speak?
when we 1st met didn't you see the way my knees went weak?
Now we're growin' apart
and it's breakin' what little sliver is left of my heart
I'm back to cryin' myself to sleep at night.
I know sumthin' isn't right.
I'm screamin' for someone to rescue me!
Why can no one see?
More importantly
Why can't you see?
It's been breakin' my heart,
cuz I know we're fallin' apart.
I thought that you cared for me
But now I've come to see
that you don't
scratch that you won't
see the pain you're puttin' me thru
why is everything I've been dreaming of fallin' apart?
this is breakin' my heart!
knowing that you don't even see me here
I thought that we were going great
Let me demonstrate on how I want to reconsiliate
we were pulled together by lust, pulled apart by hate
why must everything go wrong
pimp, I hope you hear my shattered soul sing it's broken song
because you're always gone
we were once so in love, in like, in lust,
but after only 2 weeks it seems your interest has bust.
You're making me feel things I've never felt before
dissapointment hatein' you, hatein' the world
hatein' that hoe who's always around
I've started feelin' like I've lost what I found.
Boy, you used to make my heart beat faster
dreamin' of happily ever after.
Dreamin' of a world without haters, without discrimanators
and everythin' else
this confusion that's engulfed me has gotta be bad for my health
Pimp, I love ya'
but the way you be treatin' me soon I'll be the one pimpin' you
I'll make you so jealous that you'll speak the truth
soon I'll be playin' you.
and you'll be knowin' it too
that's what you get for ignoring me,
when I was their for you.

Submitted on 2006-05-29 18:51:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  hey bubz, this got me! i can feel the pain as u showed it so well, sorry if u did feel this way!
| Posted on 2006-06-12 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
  I love this sounds like a rap to me
Its really good and i felt it and it had me gripped ...
I really enjoyed the comebacks at the end
Great work
Keep it up
God Bless U
Luv Nadine

Really clever work

Oh ok u said bash it....okay then..
the first few lines were ok but kinda slow but after that it picked up and flow was good
| Posted on 2006-05-29 00:00:00 | by lostspirit | [ Reply to This ]

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