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stomech ache

Author: star goddess
ASL Info:    18 female fantasy&reality
Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 1 /1 /3
Words: 124
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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stomech ache

My stomech achs
i cant seem to breath
i want to rip out your heart
cut it in peices
burn every lil shard till only ashes remain
you who look at me
those who glance my way
see only a sweet face
but can you read my mind?
do u know every part of me screams to stab you inside out
blood gushing out
staining the white floor
standing in a puddle of blood
not my own but yours
only then will my heart sece to race
only then will i be able to breath
once i see you dead and killed by my angry gun
stabed at with my knife
only then can i breath and walk away
my stomech ache gone.

Submitted on 2006-05-29 21:09:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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