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    dots Submission Name: Eleven for the Run, One for the Staydots
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    Author: Arev
    ASL Info:    17/M/Cal
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 13/31/21
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 786
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    Description:
       Well, I think this is my longest. I would like some help with this one. Its about Bruiser, a character from my story. this poem was inspired by an event I just finished writing.


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    dotsEleven for the Run, One for the Staydots
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    Edward William Preston
    The old hunter, him with the accent
    Their worlds collided
    Now with the stroke of his beard
    Now with words of wisdom
    He brings an element of experiance
    The hard look of years
    The hard look of age
    The hard look of...
    prevale upon his jolly face
    Bruiser they call him
    The hit man from his past
    Bruiser is simple not cluttered
    The belly of age, the grey hairs of life
    With the rifle resting in one arm he watches
    Watches Brad
    The young un
    A pull of the trigger and he unleashes death
    Death upon his foes
    And life upon his friends?
    Bruiser
    Bruiser
    Eleven for the Run
    One for the stay
    He stayed that day
    He watched as his friends ran
    They ran under orders
    One for the stay
    The first of the Food Runners to fall
    But not the last
    Bruiser knew
    Why stay crossed his mind that day
    The one voice in his head replied
    "Because, your time is up and theirs is yet to come"
    Yet to come, so young
    And I am so old
    He pumps the shotgun




    Submitted on 2006-05-29 22:03:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I read it twice... I read the description, but I still don't get it. Why is this guy sitting with a gun on his lap? Who's running when there are two people there? Is Preston Bruisor?
    Your style is really good. Thanks for writing.
    -Vas
    | Posted on 2006-05-30 00:00:00 | by hey.you | [ Reply to This ]


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