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    dots Submission Name: Dreaming in Blackdots

    Author: Persephone
    ASL Info:    19/f/ US
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 328/352/136
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Kinda funny that I'm righting this slightly optimistic poem today. It's raining and I really did just wake up from a dream where I had gone blind. This is kinda how I felt about the whole thing.

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    dotsDreaming in Blackdots

    Last night she dreamt she had gone blind,
    Dreamt that she'd lossed all ability to see.
    But this was not a scary dream,
    But one that made her so happy.

    In her dream, she was free in soul and mind,
    She could leave hurt and anger here,
    For not being able to see, scorns all hate,
    What if you're screaming is the cause of a tear?

    And as her dream moves on,
    She moves more gracefully,
    moving with nostalgic movements,
    Slow, determined, and constantly.

    Upon the waking of her dream she cries,
    her tear drops running down unchecked,
    From hurt and deep green eyes,
    Would it not be better, if she'd really gone blind?

    But things will get better, she tells herself,
    She can see and act as she did in that dream,
    She can be free of the walls of sight,
    and look passed what everyone seems.

    But if perhaps she really does lose her sight,
    Someday see black in a world of light,
    Even if she can not watch the sunset,
    Some day, she whispers, I will still find the right.

    Submitted on 2006-05-29 22:27:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a very visual poem. I love the idea of finding something out about your self through an adversity that only occured in your dreams, I am reading the Circle Trilogy and it is about roughly that. I like the fourth stanza the best, even though it breaks the rhyme scheme of the others it is the most effective. ~jennah
    | Posted on 2006-06-04 00:00:00 | by jennah | [ Reply to This ]
      There is not much that I can add to this. There is definitely a feeling of anxiouty when you wake up from a dream to find that you are miles away from that "reality". Very nice peice!

    "Dreams are but shadow truths that will endure when memory is ashes and forgot." Neil Gaiman
    | Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by Mr.Wednesday | [ Reply to This ]

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