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Dear Mum

Author: babytinkerbelle
ASL Info:    26/f/aus
Elite Ratio:    5.25 - 310 /209 /42
Words: 123
Class/Type: Misc /Love
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Yeah I know it's not poetry but I just had to get this out and write it down, so I hope you all enjoy it. I probably should mention to that it is not finished not by a long shot anyway

Dear Mum

Dear Mum,

I know how hard it had been for you to raise us all by yourself, you had no help and very little ‘thank yous’. My entire life, I’ve wanted to make you proud to be the fourth of five children, I really wanted to stand out, I’m older now and starting to understand what it is to be an adult.
I’ve had my heart broken and you were there to pick up the pieces.
I’ve lost jobs and you were there to reassure me that I am worthwhile.

This is just a small part of what makes you the best Mum, for many other reasons that I cannot begin the fathom, I thank you for always being there.

Submitted on 2006-05-30 03:35:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a sweet letter, with more depth and beauty than what one would have expected to find on reading this....quite intimate and genuine; though I did not quite understand why you say that you want your mother to be proud to be the fourth of five children.

Do you mean to say that you want your mother to be proud to be mother of the fourth of five children i
you, and that you want to stand out ??????

Also, there is a minor correction needed to be made in the second line.

Its " 'thank you's "

instead of " 'thank yous' "

You could also write it this way, if you would like to do so :


These are suggestions.
Nice work.

I am sure that your mum must have felt quite gratified on reading this.
| Posted on 2008-03-31 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
  Well Tink you expressed your love quite well if I don't say so myself! I'm sure she knows how much you love her and as always this was a great write! Thanks for sharring!
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2007-02-27 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
  I don't think it is possible to describe how much you love your mother's in words, but you have managed to express the beautiful love between a mother and a child. You had brilliant word choice, and I am sure that she will love this. Thanks for sharing, and please take a look at a poem of mine if you get the time. Thanks

| Posted on 2006-06-01 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]

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