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    Author: comradenessie
    Elite Ratio:    6.5 - 626/539/110
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Cut glass thorns
    embedded in skin
    raw and bleeding
    from sharp notes.

    Decades of scars
    testify to those lines
    of old proverbs
    not ringing true.




    Submitted on 2006-05-30 14:42:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You have captured such bitter regret, the realization that words have altered a person's soul, that they cling and pierce the skin of the heart. Powerful and polished write. Am faving this
    koster
    | Posted on 2006-12-15 00:00:00 | by koster | [ Reply to This ]
      Remember what the great Benjamin Franklin wrote, "a slip of the foot you may quickly recover but a slip of the tongue you may never forget". Words must be impeccable. They are our means of transferring what our heart, soul and mind feel. we must use words only to warm the winters that many people encounter. I am probably going to write dozens of aphorisms and proverbs but do remember that a kind word can warm three winters.

    Your poem is short but to the point. I quite enjoyed it. *Bravo* Once again excellent words. Nothing that would not be expected of a great poet. Also I would like to give you a long distance hug. I read your journal and though things may not be going your way remember that the sun hides behind the clouds. There will be a rainbow quite soon. If you ever need to talk to anyone, I will be quite happy to lend you my ear.
    | Posted on 2006-06-02 00:00:00 | by Katrinagolden | [ Reply to This ]
      I like your take on it clyde.. For some reason I had a bit of a biblical reference in mind, I guess because of your pic.. so I kind of felt like the writer was the victim, pierced by thorns undeservingly (real word?), yet still quiet, but seeping with inner rage. It made the point real for me, so I loved the imagery.
    The "decades on scars" line was a little confusing to me. Was it supposed to be "of" instead of "on", or was I just not getting the picture?
    Overall, I enjoyed it. I would have enjoyed a tad more elaboration, maybe one more stanza or an extra line in each, but it was pretty good short and sweet if thats what you were going for. Kudos!
    ~AmandaSHay~
    | Posted on 2006-05-30 00:00:00 | by mandyshay07 | [ Reply to This ]
      I think I am getting this but I am not sure.

    Sticks and stones may hurt my bones but words will never hurt me.

    This proverb was written wrong.

    Stick and stones will hurt my bones but words leave scars forever.

    I think this must be a personal write about being verbaly abused. Sometimes it is easier to take abuse when it is physical because words have a way of cutting to the core.

    Well Enough of my rambling

    Nicely done

    Respect and Admiration

    Clyde
    | Posted on 2006-05-30 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
      Cut glass thorns
    embedded in skin
    raw and bleeding
    from sharp notes.

    Decades on scars
    testify to those lines
    of old proverbs
    not ringing true.


    Proverbs such as 'you're as young as you feel,' 'beauty is truth, truth is beauty' (except to politicians and pragmatists) and of course, the one mentioned above (if words didn't hurt, hate might not exist; what a sobering thought).

    Did you mean 'decades of scars' by the way? It appears to make more sense, but it somehow strips the write of a layer of its meaning.

    An interesting write, comrade.
    Take care of yourself.
    Bill.
    | Posted on 2006-05-30 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you meant,

    "Decades OF scars" a minor typo but for me it changes the whole piece.

    I really like this, and it is cool to hear someones thoughts on the power of words. Well done.

    Tom
    | Posted on 2006-05-30 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]
      Am I getting this...?

    words hurt like sticks and stones?

    nice. that's what I get from it at least. I like how you worded it. concise.