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    dots Submission Name: the silly thingsdots
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    Author: luvy
    ASL Info:    19/F/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 270/168/35
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsthe silly thingsdots
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    Pushing you away means i want you close

    When i say i cant stand you
    Your the only one i want

    When i run away
    follow me

    When i pout
    kiss my lips

    When i call you crazy
    im crazy about you

    When theres silance
    im thinking of ways to say i love you

    If i ignore you
    i want all of your attention

    When i pull away
    grab me and never let go

    When im in my sweats
    tell me im sexy

    When I scream at you
    Whisper lovingly in my ear

    When you see me walking
    Sneak up behing me and rest your head on my shoulder

    If I don't call you
    Im waiting for you to call

    When I'm scared
    Hold me tight

    When I look like something's the matter-
    Kiss me and say everything going to be alright even if it isnt





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      this is the amazing! i'm definitely adding this to my faves list. this reminds me so much of the [censored] me and cherie do. i'm a send it to her on myspace. and yes ur silly ass did have a lotta of spelling mess ups but i forgive u since u wrote such a great poem
    | Posted on 2006-09-12 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      HEY U!!!! GENAS IN LOVEE WIT somebody that she hasnt TOLD me who but I DO go 2 SCHOOL! wit u and I WILL find out!! hehe but i like this its a nice write!! it was all floaty!! DO U FEEL FLOATY! WOW i had WAY to much sugar!! HEEH!
    ~akaila~
    THE LIONS R ROARING!
    | Posted on 2006-09-10 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      It’s cute, and shows how girls act and how they want boys to react (sadly , they usually don’t get what they expect ) .
    The rhythm was off in the stanzas number 11 and the last one , and it should be “When there’s silence “ not “When theres silence “ and “Sneak up behing “ should be “ sneak up behind “ . and it’s “ I’m “ not ” Im “ in stanza number 13 , it’s just little spelling errors you should consider correcting them . over all it’s a nice poem
    Have a good day
    ~~drakoniss~~
    | Posted on 2006-06-05 00:00:00 | by drakoniss | [ Reply to This ]


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