Sign up to EliteSkills

Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password

Rap (untitled)

Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 193
Class/Type: Lyrics /Misc
Total Views: 1475
Average Vote:    No vote yet.
Bytes: 1102


yo man verse one wasn't all that tight but i'll work wit it tell me what u think

Rap (untitled)

now u can sit and talk shit about me
but u know it ain't true
the same things u do to me
gon come back to get u
i make promises no threats
u ain't see nothing yet
and u claim u can pop off at me
yea i bet
((verse one))
lets get it straight
a gun don't make a man
only his fist does
and i know good and well
u hide when push come to shove
u like to talk real big when u surrounded with croweds
but when i get u alone shit u don't open your mouth
now..there's one thing that never cease to confuse me
i understand i fucked your ass
but now u claim that used me
i was the virgin on the block but every time i pass
i hear u talkin about me nigga kiss my ass
another thing i don't work will with the he said and she said
so u can stop tellin ur friends shit
and leave it to rest
i'ma leave the rest to someone who really cares
u wanted to hit but u didn't even dare

Submitted on 2006-05-30 18:25:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!


  i didn't think this one was that good. sorry babe. i can tell ur pissed but i just wasn't feeling the rythm or the rhyme. the only i got out of this was the emotion behind it.
| Posted on 2006-06-07 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  on the block with not one gun
threats I treat like wiggley's gum
i chew up the hate
and make you wait
wait for more pain
and terror that you claim
is all bout self gain
selfesteem low
you need all the blows
to help yourself grow
I will not mention your name
so back off
there's no way
I'm giving you fame

God loves you but stay true to the call he has on you
| Posted on 2006-05-30 00:00:00 | by dudethis | [ Reply to This ]

Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?