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    dots Submission Name: Rap (untitled)dots
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    Author: Poeticprincess
    ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333/325/104
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 970
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1102



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       yo man verse one wasn't all that tight but i'll work wit it tell me what u think


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    dotsRap (untitled)dots
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    ((chours))
    now u can sit and talk shit about me
    but u know it ain't true
    the same things u do to me
    gon come back to get u
    i make promises no threats
    u ain't see nothing yet
    and u claim u can pop off at me
    yea i bet
    ((verse one))
    lets get it straight
    a gun don't make a man
    only his fist does
    and i know good and well
    u hide when push come to shove
    u like to talk real big when u surrounded with croweds
    but when i get u alone shit u don't open your mouth
    now..there's one thing that never cease to confuse me
    i understand i fucked your ass
    but now u claim that used me
    i was the virgin on the block but every time i pass
    i hear u talkin about me nigga kiss my ass
    another thing i don't work will with the he said and she said
    so u can stop tellin ur friends shit
    and leave it to rest
    i'ma leave the rest to someone who really cares
    u wanted to hit but u didn't even dare




    Submitted on 2006-05-30 18:25:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i didn't think this one was that good. sorry babe. i can tell ur pissed but i just wasn't feeling the rythm or the rhyme. the only i got out of this was the emotion behind it.
    | Posted on 2006-06-07 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      on the block with not one gun
    threats I treat like wiggley's gum
    i chew up the hate
    and make you wait
    wait for more pain
    and terror that you claim
    is all bout self gain
    selfesteem low
    you need all the blows
    to help yourself grow
    I will not mention your name
    so back off
    there's no way
    I'm giving you fame



    God loves you but stay true to the call he has on you
    | Posted on 2006-05-30 00:00:00 | by dudethis | [ Reply to This ]


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