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    dots Submission Name: A Raisin in your Arterydots
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    Author: Colten
    ASL Info:    19/Man?lol/U of I
    Elite Ratio:    3.05 - 62/99/43
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Dark
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       Just trying to release my evil side...he's an evil little bastard isn't he.


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    dotsA Raisin in your Arterydots
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    What would happen if I shoved a raisin in your artery?

    Let us say your Superior Vena Cava to be exact.

    Now...this raisin would plug up your circulation.
    It would act as a clot, stemming the flow of blood to your heart.

    You would instantly have a heart attack.

    You would show all the signs of a classic blood clot heart attack except...
    It would not have been caused by a natural blood clot.

    *maniacal laughing*

    Just imagine your body screaming for blood.

    Your heart is desperately trying to pump,
    But nothing will come.

    So...

    The cells in your heart that cause it to beat work overtime.
    They increase the voltage of their shocks,
    Trying to get blood into your failing body.

    Unfortunately, they try to hard.

    The power in the beats catches your heart on fire!
    And you burn on the inside...
    Then explode.

    All because I put a raisin in your artery.

    *hysterical laughing*




    Submitted on 2006-05-30 21:40:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Haha..wow..you are so demented...nice!! Isn't it fun writing about killing people? The dark side of life is so much fun to write about...dementia, paranoia, killing lust...makes me wanna write one now. You should let your evil side out more often!

    ~Kat
    | Posted on 2006-05-31 00:00:00 | by MorbidAngel114 | [ Reply to This ]
      lmao, I laughed at this, very demented, but it totally rocked. I don't have much to say about this...I'm speachless. I'm adding this to my favorites if you don't mind...very desricptive, you definitely shot many morbid images in my mind. Keep writing like this and I'll beback for more!

    *tox*
    | Posted on 2006-05-30 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok, that was slightly scary. It was good, really full of imagery, which is always a plus. Now it scares me just a little bit becuase you put so much thought in how you would do it. So...the lesson I learned is to never make you angery. and no chocolate rasins at the movies for you!

    Cheers,
    ~Sephe~
    | Posted on 2006-05-30 00:00:00 | by Persephone | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm.... interesting thinking... i really like where you were going with this... however... you would not isntantly have a heart attack... it would take aproximately five minutes... but they would immediately feel lightheaded and pretty horrible. this was a little less of a poem... more of a kind of rant... but i liked it anyway... i think adding more would be good. make it into a poem and add a bit more... i liked it. enjoy
    | Posted on 2006-05-30 00:00:00 | by Esophagus1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh Colten...this is very twisted and strange. Although it does make you think of those people out there who may deserve a couple raisins...just something to think about. ~jennah
    | Posted on 2006-06-04 00:00:00 | by jennah | [ Reply to This ]


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