A Dark meaningful fancy! but you only wrote the idea, and although as a poet I love that, all the same most readers want a story ... the story would be a metaphor for the idea, when you found the story for it, it might be a personal discovery ... putting additional layers of work on a piece is always self-discovering. When it is difficult to start or we don't want to ... that's a window in the sky of strange windows ... they won't open for you. You open them.
Wow! I like this - you cram so much into just a few words, and give the reader a terrific picture. nice intensity here. I like that you use voluptuous; it really emphasizes her lips with all the other words being small. And 'liquid kiss' is a great ending. Excellent work.
It was short, but very intense and passionate. I liked the rhyming thing you had going on here...it added extra emotion. The title was great, by the way. it's what drew me to read your poem. There's not a whole lot to say about this poem because it's so short, but I did enjoy it very much. Keep writing!