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Magnetic Poetry


Author: Krinchinian
ASL Info:    20/f/pa
Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 164 /231 /84
Words: 25
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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i was playing with magnetic poetry..and this is my short but to the point brainstorm



Magnetic Poetry



Delirious moments together
Like blood smearing beautry
Through moons elaborate shadows
Leaving frantic death behind
Luscious screams in my head
Floodless whispers
Staring into blackness




Submitted on 2006-05-31 05:05:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hmmm. Very paradoxical here, Kris, I guess you're writing of the bitter-sweet taste of love? Maybe stolen moments?

Deep indeed, for such a short piece, and probably darker than I want to look (I'm afraid of the dark...lol)

Interesting

be happy

Graeme
| Posted on 2006-06-01 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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