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CRyiNG bLO0d

Author: diamonds_2_dust
ASL Info:    15/m/Eugene Oregon
Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 105 /161 /35
Words: 160
Class/Type: Poetry /What you did
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CRyiNG bLO0d

You've pulled me down
and stuck a knife in my gut
I've shown some sympathy
but this is too much
You've been begging for a friend
when you ran them all off
now i don't blame them
this has to stop
We were once close
and once you had a heart
but all i see
is the same old dark
the dry sillence
why emotions should be
you squandered it all
and so you come to me
You've been sucking my blood
i've stooped so low
No more fucking pitty
you've got to go!

Get your hands Off!
I dont give a shit
you cut your ties to me
so this is what you get
You stabbed me in the back
and betrayed my trust
so i feel no pitty
for your desires and lust
You think i should care
for a heartless bitch like you
Find some other sex toy
'cause you and me are through

Submitted on 2006-05-31 14:15:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  lol, there's no way I need further description of what you're talking about. I get exactly what you're saying. I agree with what was said below me...I totally felt as if you were screaming this at me....I can relate to the whole person trying to crawl to you and beg you for friendship thing. I'm sorry this [censored] did this to one deserves to be treated like they're disposable.

Again, I'm sorry someone did this to you, it's happened to me once, too...peace...for now or never

| Posted on 2006-05-31 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a very interesting piece, and I enjoyed reading every bit of it. People can be so cruel and heartless. This poem showed so much emotion, and it felt as though you were actually talking to me. . . . . . . . . . . . . . great job on this piece.

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| Posted on 2006-05-31 00:00:00 | by Je Vous Aime | [ Reply to This ]
  Dang, this is really emotional. I just don't understand how people can tell someone that they love them, and still go off and break their f.ucking heart. I'm glad that you aren't getting back with her. You are a very smart person for knowing that if she'll hurt you once, she'll do it again. I've had this happen to me once or twice, and i know that its not fun.......Great write, and I can't wait to read some more of your work!!
| Posted on 2006-06-06 00:00:00 | by alcoholcaust | [ Reply to This ]
  haha no if anyone does need a further descrip for this one I already have a desire to f.ucking shoot them. lol this did have an "in-ur-face" almost screaming kinda attitude that really did fit the whole thing, I'm sorry you went through this [censored], it sucks how bad stuff happens to the ppl who deserve to be treated so much better, not that anyone deserves that [censored], but you are way above some [censored] like that. it's happened to the best of us sometimes tho, if anyone can not relate to this they are truely lucky, cuz I sure as hell can, especially right this second in my life.
take care,
| Posted on 2006-06-11 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
  NIce choice of words and delivery. Your rhyming keeps the flow going nicely

| Posted on 2006-06-03 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
  wow! ouch! power and pain! yikes!
i like it! you're so over it! thats the best part! hm...i dont know what to say...
its pretty cold and straight forward and thats awesome too. and i really do like the emotion and feeling all mixed together like that. nice work

| Posted on 2006-06-24 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]

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