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    dots Submission Name: Okaydots

    Author: beth freese
    ASL Info:    18.F.Earth
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 74/113/39
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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       my cousin died and my parents flew over to be with my dad's sister and so then my friend ed came over and yeah. it's about how she came over. she's so nice.

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    You called me that night
    You asked if you should
    Come over
    And I said no, no Iím
    You called that night
    And said Iím coming over
    I said okay.
    I said thanks.
    You came.
    We hugged,
    We slept,
    And blew our noses,
    And hugged,
    And then
    We laughed.
    And it was ok.
    I was okay.
    Just okay.
    But okay nonetheless.

    Submitted on 2006-05-31 18:22:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      omg, don't I know what it's like to need a friend who'll comfort you. I have this best friend, and we do anything for each other, she's rad, haha.
    I'd classify your write as like a short story and a not so much poem. But, classify it whatever you want it was still good. Keep writing.

    | Posted on 2006-05-31 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]

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