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    dots Submission Name: boys and girls race for the worlddots
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    Author: sweet sorenity
    ASL Info:    24/f/ Ga
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 211/221/58
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
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    dotsboys and girls race for the worlddots
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    Throw your hats
    dont look back
    say good bye to the pond and hello to the ocean
    just egnor all the camotion

    smile for the camra your 4th in your class
    you want to screem 'kisss my ass'
    the world is in your hands
    your parents are no longer your fan

    hug old friends
    this stage has come to an end
    walk down the sairs and dry your eyes
    you cant let the teachers know you cry

    one more look
    all you have left is your year book




    Submitted on 2006-05-31 21:46:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      see you didn't miss much. I missed it too, no big deal. I think you left the "t" out of "stairs". keep writing, one of has to.
    | Posted on 2006-05-31 00:00:00 | by joe quinn | [ Reply to This ]
      Sorenity,

    It has been a long time since I commit on one of your poems. I can see that your mistakes are typos so I want elaborate on it. This poem seems like a poem that was written from the frontal depths of your mind. It seems like a poem you created out of the blue. Keep writing.
    | Posted on 2006-06-16 00:00:00 | by B-Gentle | [ Reply to This ]


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