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He is the One


Author: babytinkerbelle
ASL Info:    26/f/aus
Elite Ratio:    5.25 - 310 /209 /42
Words: 110
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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A poem for my boyfriend, it's going to need some work so I'll probably repost soon. Anyway thoughts and feed back will be greatly appreciated.


He is the One



When we met
We were both unsure
Of what we wanted

One year on
And now I know
It was you
That I was waiting for

I don’t believe
In fate
I don’t believe
In love at first sight

It has taken many months
For me to trust you
It has taken many months
To finally see the truth

You are the one
To take away the pain
You are the one
To help me trust again

We’ve both been through a lot
And at times, it’s not easy
But if we stick together
I know we’ll make it through




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  If Only It Was That Easy
I Wish Love Was This Simple
But It Seems You Gotta Fight For Love
I Hope You And Your Boyfriend Are Still Goin Strong
Love Stacey
| Posted on 2007-07-23 00:00:00 | by AngelinDisguise | [ Reply to This ]
  Tink
First let me say how Happy I am to see your name Again
I missed you so much
How are you doing?
I hope and Pray everything is ok
In this write I see you have found a soulmate
You have not rushed into this and it seems this one is your Soulmate for Life
Remain Strong and Positive Tink
If you EVER EVER need someone to Talk to Please know Im always here
God Bless
Your Friend Always
Ron
| Posted on 2006-06-01 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this poem ok. It was a nice poem to read about love and not about heartbreak that are usually posted. Something different and it was nice.

~Christina aka POETRY
| Posted on 2006-06-01 00:00:00 | by POETRY | [ Reply to This ]
  Isn't it great to finally find the one? The one to take away the pain..the one to help you trust. Finding that person is the most amazing feeling in the world, and once we have it we need to hang onto it. Even when it's hard...it's just like you said, couples just need to stick together and make it through. thanks for writing this..reminded me of my man and my love...great write. ~hailie~
| Posted on 2006-06-09 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]


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