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    dots Submission Name: Nefarious Devotiondots
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    Author: darkness child
    ASL Info:    21/F/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 195/266/48
    Words: 234
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 844
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 1468



    Description:
       Um...it explains itself. This was very spur of the moment, I didn't plan it out, I just wrote. Don't think it is dramatic, because it is very true. Maybe I'm childish, but I don't think so.


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    dotsNefarious Devotiondots
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    Please understand the depth of my love,
    It's endless, undefiled, eternal.
    Sometimes I think you doubt me.
    How can I show you the internal?

    I would exchange my soul for yours,
    If there really is a Hell.
    And angels truly do grow wings,
    At the tolling of a bell.

    Or if there is such a place,
    Where the souls condemned reside,
    And if yours will be there,
    Then so, too, will be mine.

    Or if I had a choice,
    Between Heaven or Hell.
    If it means I could be with you,
    I would gladly sin and tell-

    "God, you must have forgotten,
    A transgression I have made.
    I refuse to go to Heaven,
    If he's condemned, I'll use this blade."

    If only to see your face,
    Even if it's contorted with pain.
    If only to meet your eyes,
    Even if there gleams something insane.

    I wish you were beside me,
    To hold me as I die,
    To staunch the flow of blood,
    And sit numbly as I cry.

    I wish that we could live,
    To love just one more day.
    But if I could die and be with you,
    I'll choose gladly not to stay.

    Because through all the pain and torment,
    I'll be right there with you.
    Our love is flawless, everlasting,
    Neither God nor Satan can subdue.




    Submitted on 2006-06-01 10:57:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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