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    dots Submission Name: Apple talkdots

    Author: Wolfe
    Elite Ratio:    4.64 - 62/94/25
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 1034
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       My school has a server. The district has a disfunctional one. Observations of a Human Machine.

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    dotsApple talkdots

    Pinpricks of apple skin flash on
    and off
    and on again

    Glowing green like venom
    Like toxic waste
    A malicious stoplight
    On a road no longer traveled
    Blinking on
    And off
    And on again

    Can't you hear them?
    Sneering at us
    Little holes filled with the all-nothing
    The light
    Pinpricks of malevolence
    Blink on
    And off
    And on again

    Through an Amazon of blue cords
    Grotesquely vibrant
    In a world not ever meant to see
    Such story-book-vivid color
    Rotten stars
    Super novas
    Polka dots
    Hollow eyes of killers
    Blink on
    And off
    And on again

    Too quickly
    Too much
    A rapid convulsion of virtual requiem

    Server is crashing


    Damn you, Apple talk.

    Submitted on 2006-06-01 15:10:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ha ha! That is really hilarious! I love satire, and you did it really well. The rhythm is flawless. I absolutely adore this. I can't comment on things I like. I just gush. So . . . *gush*.
    | Posted on 2006-06-01 00:00:00 | by HaldirLives | [ Reply to This ]
      *sight* i hate you. it was good, i know you can do better, you seemed to have a theme in the beginning but then it kinda deminishes after a while and it goes off on another track which... is a little confusesing. But other than that, o and you had a nice sequence of the on off on and on again, and then it changed, i dont know... but it just didnt seem to fit very well... i think if you wanted to change the sequence it would have been better to change the world like, life death, light dark, opposites like that or something. I liked it, not my fav, but its good!
    | Posted on 2006-06-02 00:00:00 | by Moonshadow | [ Reply to This ]

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