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    dots Submission Name: Broken Homedots
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    Author: jslbabygirl101
    ASL Info:    18/f/ga
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 76/82/49
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 993
    Average Vote:    4.3333
    Bytes: 698



    Description:
       This is about my home. It is really hard to talk about right now so that is all I am going to say.


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    dotsBroken Homedots
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    I live in a broken home;
    where nobody knows,
    and i feel so alone;
    my emotions; they never show.


    A blackened heart;
    so lonely and lost,
    I don't know where to start;
    was my dignity the cost?

    I do everything around here;
    and I yell it out,
    but you still won't hear;
    so I guess I won't know what you are about.

    Something should have told me;
    that I should have known,
    that you would never see;
    our broken home.

    Our broken home;
    will never be fixed,
    so I will always be alone;
    where my emotions are mixed.




    Submitted on 2006-06-01 18:47:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey Jessica

    This was gut-wrenching, honestly. I wish I could come over to you just so you have a friend. I hope you know that you can email me anytime just to gush, rant, rave, whatever, I'm here for you. I really wish I could give you a super hug right now. I can't say I know what you're going through but I understand pain, my folks just got divorced recently, I live with my dad, needless to say, I end up doing a lot around the house and noboby notices when I'm upset, or in pain, I have to be the strong one for my younger sisters, play mommy. I know thats not the same, sorry for gushing. I really hope you'll be okay.

    ((((HUG)))) *Dani
    | Posted on 2006-06-03 00:00:00 | by firefoxvixen | [ Reply to This ]
      its really great and i really know where you are comming from when you write this
    it maybe hard now, but eventually you will be more comfortable writing about it...and if you have a few really good friends that you can talk to it helps a lot
    Just a little advice take it or leave it
    Keep it up
    Peace
    Star
    | Posted on 2006-06-02 00:00:00 | by Star | [ Reply to This ]
      Amazing poem. I can realate to this so much. It made it's point and it rhymed not much more to say than ...nice write.


    ~bianca
    | Posted on 2006-06-02 00:00:00 | by bmc | [ Reply to This ]
      hey i loved your poem! i can relate some and your emotions show.
    | Posted on 2006-06-02 00:00:00 | by fallenfromgrace | [ Reply to This ]
      nice job has a lyrical flow dont know how to improve it im not a very good commenter buut meh i tryed.... sorry :(
    | Posted on 2006-06-01 00:00:00 | by mikie... | [ Reply to This ]


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