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    dots Submission Name: circle of freaks, geeks and insinceritiesdots
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    Author: EEKS
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    dotscircle of freaks, geeks and insinceritiesdots
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    Kiss up punks, and cardboard friends, blow up dolls, and streamers
    visual aides, and premarital aids, punching bag girls, and screamers
    lost lonely losers, denial sunken abusers, bad guys choosers, and dreamers
    single serving lovers, single serving friends, single serving self control, the circle never ever ends
    around and around we go, hating all the way down

    wannabe a carefree girl in a non-material world but instead i am here and i am anything but carefree and careful
    i guess i'm somewhere in between

    little boys with guns, and big girls with big problems, and everyone with tears and no one to talk to in this world full of people
    we'd rather love strangers, and worship faceless names than reveal ourselves and lay out our secrets, we used to be KNIGHTS, but now we are scientists, Liars out to hate people like us

    insecure pretty girls, lying cheating pretty boys, quiet sincere secretkeepers, loud rude moneyholders, beauties in the eyes of beholders, and people who will never have anyone to hold them, such a twsited cirle where no one can find each other even though we're all lonely and searching.




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      "ittle boys with guns, and big girls with big problems, and everyone with tears and no one to talk to in this world full of people
    we'd rather love strangers, and worship faceless names than reveal ourselves and lay out our secrets, we used to be KNIGHTS, but now we are scientists, Liars out to hate people like us"
    this was my favorite part. stick to words with few sylabbles (im sorry that im a horrible speller).

    "scientists' and 'us' work really well together.

    "worship faceless names than reveal ourselves and lay out our secrets"
    i feel the word 'ourseleves' dosen't fit, and that it sticks out. i do not understand what ytou mean by 'faceless names'. using the word 'worship before that makes me think you mean a greater being, like god. is that what you were going for?
    | Posted on 2006-06-03 00:00:00 | by i am mouchette | [ Reply to This ]


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