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Some days Love is an angel, or a silent wind.
Some days the river, and the fish that swim within.
Some days Love is as simple as a passing glance
Some days a song to which we both dance.
This is a short poem and it needs to be a little long, and you shouldn't start every stanza with "Some Days". this needs more detail because this is basically to the point., This is a disguised writing also......
Wonderful. I thought magnificant especially with that soothing picture of a serene lake or ocean. It was short but said alot. less is more in most cases.
Great job. -we are not that what makes us...but just who we are beneath the masses of our disguise.
This is beautiful. Needs to be longer though. It does convey your message, which i'm guessing is that love is everywhere, but it'd be so much better if it was longer and you put like needling detail into this.
Submission Name: some days
