I dream a dreamer's dream, That I, Being one of heart, Here not what lies, but Here what flows.
This stanza threw me. First off, 'being one of heart' - well, it's only you that you're talking about. How many hearts do you have? I'd suggest changing that to 'strong of heart' or 'true of heart'. It would make more sense.
And then, do you mean 'hear', as in with your ears? Spelling matters. And I don't understand what you're saying when you put 'not what lies but here what flows' I really have no idea what that means. (I do understand that it flows into the next stanza.) This doesn't strike me as an abstract poem, so we should be able to understand your meaning.
Except for that stanza, which, as it turns out, is the heart of your poem, this is a succinct little personal description. I like your repetition of a 'dreamer's dream'. It would be nice if you could somehow conclude with that or a variation of it.
That's pretty much as I think,yet a degree towards perfection should end your poem with: Then to move the body through the mind's capacity in search what is soul.
Submission Name: Dreamer
