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    dots Submission Name: love is the most dangerous gamedots
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    Author: $tefano
    ASL Info:    14 male new york
    Elite Ratio:    0.96 - 2/4/9
    Words: 274
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotslove is the most dangerous gamedots
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    the feeling like u lost it all
    like you will forever fall
    the choice is hard to make
    but u have to for your own sake
    let your feelings out
    scream and shout
    or hold it all in as u pout
    well i made my desicion
    i used total precision
    but it didnt go all that well
    i feel like my life is a living hell
    so ill try and forget it
    but i feel like shit
    i was such a fool
    this girl is way too cool
    she is way outa my league
    because she is a true beauty
    a total cutie
    who am i to think i had a chance
    a girl like her would never give me a second glance
    me well im nothing special
    nothin really at all
    so i continue to fall
    ill keep it all inside again
    and just be a good friend
    its really hard to keep it in
    hearts been stabbed continuesly with a pin
    but ill just go bak to being my shy self
    look at that blade upon my shelf
    does ne one really care?
    if i feel this way will ne one shed a tear
    help me thru my fear?
    i guess not
    im givin up
    one last shot
    thats all i got
    but am i too afraid to take it?
    will i even make it?
    i dont think so
    this is just a thing that u know
    why cant i get these thoughts out of my head
    all the shit i coulda and shoulda said
    maybe it would have changed it
    but probally not
    this girl is just way too hot




    Submitted on 2006-06-03 15:25:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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