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    dots Submission Name: Queen of the Nightdots
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    Author: whendt
    Elite Ratio:    1.98 - 902/387/108
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       A beautiful Flower


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    dotsQueen of the Nightdots
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    Your bloom only comes out at night
    Your perfumed sent is like a spell
    your white plumes reflect the stars
    A vine that keeps you in the ground
    Skin so white
    Its a shame you only come out at night
    London could not keep you
    America was your quest
    A golden garden path
    The beauty is unmatched
    What causes you to bloom at night
    Because you are pollinated
    By nocturnal animals
    Angel's Trumpet
    As you come out at night
    Fairy's float among your Vail
    The bride of the moon
    Water flows into your veins
    The sun rises and you die for another day...




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      It is really beautiful... i just love it.

    Fairys float among your veil
    The bride of the moon
    Water flows into your veins

    What a great desciption and expression of pure joy... this is an immediate favourite!

    Very well done!!!
    | Posted on 2007-11-28 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]
      ''You come out at night''. I love this piece. The idea is creative. It kind of makes me think of nightlife, you know:disco, clubbing, going wild and berserk :-) while being kind of delicate at the same time. Surreal really.
    | Posted on 2006-09-29 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      oh i love poems about nature and you really captured this flower. I love the line "the bride of the moon" i really appreciate it when writers use nature in a connected way, in revelance to each other. Do you understand what i mean? because we are all connected in the natural world and people really should stop and look around for once and enjoy the flowers. nice potrayal of innocence also , keep up the good work. nature poems are your fortay.
    | Posted on 2006-06-03 00:00:00 | by concrete_rose | [ Reply to This ]
      this is an amazing piece of poetry. i loved how magical your imagry was. it sounded to me as if the winds and the soul of that flower were calling to me. excellent.
    ~john-paul
    | Posted on 2006-06-07 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey i really like this (and not just because of the vine reference ;-)) i'm gonna favorite this one so i can read it a few times and get to grips with it. ii connect with this poem on so many levels.

    thank you
    | Posted on 2006-06-06 00:00:00 | by Topher Vine | [ Reply to This ]
      ah. I really like this. The picture is really pretty too. At first I was like huh? because I was just expecting it to be about a person. But I enjoyed reading it...and I've never read a poem like this..just about a flower. Very nice. Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2006-07-26 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey this is a very well written poem. Although it is a simple poem about nature I think it has a lot of depth. I donít know why but I have a feeling it is not just about a flower, do correct me if I am wrong. Anyway you have a nice flow and your wording is very good. I like the title the most. It makes one relax while reading. It is like having an excursion in a fantasy world.

    Angel's Trumpet
    As you come out at night
    Fairy's float among your Vail
    The bride of the moon

    Just lovely.

    I would like to take this opportunity to thank you for your lovely comments on my poem. I am glad you like it.
    With love Shabnam
    | Posted on 2006-06-05 00:00:00 | by shabnam | [ Reply to This ]


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