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Author: Metal Heart74
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I wanted to write apoem about monopoly, I have no idea why


Silence as two cubes glide through the air
Silence broken as they descend to the cardboard wasteland - How Colorful It Is!
A metal shoe too small for size, a small pupdog - gleam in his eye
Shake with the impact, but move not an inch
1 dot and 3 face the sky
A top hat glides forth four spaces
A symbol of awkwardness
squiggle and dot
Wind is stirred as it descends from the sky
A glorius rectangle - with a symbol the same
rises hovers and falls
Paper flutters through the sky, Bright Orange! Sickly Green.
A race with no finish
As the houses amass and hotels charge
Paper of glorious colors flutters in the sky
Rectangles ascend to the heavens
come crashing back down
Dotted Cubes pierce the sky
Carboard wasteland shakes with impacting die
A queer race, without a finish
A square circle, a reactrack around, with colors and houses quite abound
This is a world known to all
Monopoly! Where on must take it or fall!

Submitted on 2006-06-03 23:45:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hee hee. This was so unique. No body writes a poem about a game, and now I don't know why. This turned out great. I don't know what you could change, except perhaps, making the pattern of rhymes similar throughout the poem. YOu used powerful words to create remarkable descriptions. Good Job. I would like if you took a look at a poem of mine. Thanks

| Posted on 2006-06-04 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
  I absolutely love the fact that you wrote a poem about Monopoly! However, it doesn't totally work. The rhythm is off, especially in the first half, and your descriptions aren't terribly imaginative. I also don't think there is a strong voice behind it. Tweak it. I love the premise.
| Posted on 2006-06-03 00:00:00 | by HaldirLives | [ Reply to This ]

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