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Author: Fraser
ASL Info:    26
Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 30 /55 /35
Words: 109
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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having strength in a tough situation


Its a long ardous road that a man must voyage
to a place of stiffness and waters of boil
like the statue that balances the earth on its back
you'll remain beneath till your spine goes flat
this journey changes a man from young to old
battling the rapids of the stories untold
despair clings to your brain like a fawn to its mother
lay close to shore and hold on my brother
patience is needed to remain afloat
dealing with problems that a wise man wrote
with backbreaking labour and a drought of the spirit
there are times my friend when all you can do is endure it

Submitted on 2006-06-04 20:15:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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holding on or as you said strenght is the soul of this poem as well of this world, what attracted me most is your way of simbolism take first two lines for example who thought hell can be described this way. well i said hell since i believe it is on earth not anywhere else.

this journey changes a man from young to old

this line showed this poem has a deeper root, so one then know he or she has to dig down and also assures me that i am reading a wise head's poem. so its a pleasure to be in your hands.
years are not what age a man its the expriencess.

i liked the way you discribed that life is a spiritual journey and we are the travellers learning and moving on.
everything ends so will our pains to, we just have to hold on.

if we smile at life it will smile back at us.



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