love you

Author: biffy2006 ASL Info:    18/f/N.I Elite Ratio:    1.64 - 25 /16 /9 Words: 67

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love you

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Your sweet your kind I love you so So, i wanted you to know Your special to me in every way I want to hold you every day I want to spend eternity In a place just u And me your in my mind day and night I want to kiss you hold you tight Your in my soul you are my life

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Short, needs a bit of work. A good beginning. A couple of errors, just proofread a bit. I did like it. If you add more, let me know. Uma Soph

| Posted on 2006-06-06 00:00:00 | by Soph | [ Reply to This ]

when you said you and me..it should have been you and i . Also, i was thinking "Your sweet your kind " you could have done :: Your sweet your kind I love you so:: but overall not too bad veryy cute

| Posted on 2006-06-07 00:00:00 | by G unit jeanne | [ Reply to This ]

I think this feel a little bit unfinished, I reckon you just need one more line on it. It's really good, really deep and sweet! It shows you have a soft, loving side! (which is kinda obvious from the poem!) Yeah I really like it! But, just one thing, in the first line the 'your' should be 'you're' that's probably just picky, I just thought I'd point it out! Well done :-)

| Posted on 2006-06-05 00:00:00 | by nuttyginna | [ Reply to This ]

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