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love you


Author: biffy2006
ASL Info:    18/f/N.I
Elite Ratio:    1.64 - 25 /16 /9
Words: 67
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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love you



Your sweet your kind
I love you so
So, i wanted you to know
Your special to me in every way
I want to hold you every day
I want to spend eternity
In a place just u And me your in my mind day and night
I want to kiss you hold you tight
Your in my soul you are my life




Submitted on 2006-06-04 20:55:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Short, needs a bit of work. A good beginning. A couple of errors, just proofread a bit. I did like it. If you add more, let me know.

Uma Soph
| Posted on 2006-06-06 00:00:00 | by Soph | [ Reply to This ]
  when you said you and me..it should have been you and i . Also, i was thinking "Your sweet your kind "
you could have done ::
Your sweet
your kind
I love you so::

but overall not too bad veryy cute
| Posted on 2006-06-07 00:00:00 | by G unit jeanne | [ Reply to This ]
  I think this feel a little bit unfinished, I reckon you just need one more line on it. It's really good, really deep and sweet! It shows you have a soft, loving side! (which is kinda obvious from the poem!) Yeah I really like it! But, just one thing, in the first line the 'your' should be 'you're' that's probably just picky, I just thought I'd point it out! Well done :-)
| Posted on 2006-06-05 00:00:00 | by nuttyginna | [ Reply to This ]


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