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    dots Submission Name: I WILL DANCE AGAINdots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.08 - 366/364/154
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 573
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 691



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       LOOKING TO MY JESUS FOR HEALING.


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    dotsI WILL DANCE AGAINdots
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    I WILL DANCE AGAIN
    FOREVER WILL MY HEART DREAM
    FOR HE SHALL SET MY FEET DANCING
    TO THE RHYTHM OF HIS PLAN, YEA
    TO THE MELODY OF HIS HEART

    THE ALMIGHTY SHALL CAUSE ME
    TO MASTER THE STEPS
    OF THE UNFORCED RHYTHMS OF HIS GRACE
    AMIABLE IS MY LORD WHO SHALL
    SWEEP ME OFF MY FEET

    HE SHALL DRAW ME EVER SO CLOSE
    AND EMBRACE ME UNTO
    THE EXQUISITENESS OF HIS BOSOM
    AND BY HIS MIGHTY POWER
    HOLD ME THERE

    FOR HE SHALL PLACE MY HEAD FIRMLY
    NEAR HIS HEART THAT I MAY HEAR
    AND MY LIFE SING THE CHORUS
    OF THE INNERMOST RECESSES
    OF HIS HEART




    Submitted on 2006-06-04 22:19:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very beautiful. I really enjoyed this. It kinda reminds me of reading Psalms....though I'm not sure why...maybe the way it's worded. You did a very wonderful job on this.

    Kris
    | Posted on 2006-06-05 00:00:00 | by Raindrops | [ Reply to This ]
      This is quite unique and has it's own style and I agree it does Dance to it's own musical pattern. It is a very enjoyeable and heartfelt read. In each heart The Father guides the way and these words make your heart dance and your soul wanna dance too. This is my favorite verse here, because it truely grabs your heart strings and your soul.

    HE SHALL DRAW ME EVER SO CLOSE
    AND EMBRACE ME UNTO
    THE EXQUISITENESS OF HIS BOSOM
    AND BY HIS MIGHTY POWER
    HOLD ME THERE

    Keep up the great writing.

    Ladymustang

    | Posted on 2006-06-10 00:00:00 | by LadyMustang | [ Reply to This ]
      I WILL DANCE AGAIN
    FOREVER WILL MY HEART DREAM
    FOR HE SHALL SET MY FEET DANCING
    TO THE RHYTHM OF HIS PLAN, YEA
    TO THE MELODY OF HIS HEART

    THE ALMIGHTY SHALL CAUSE ME
    TO MASTER THE STEPS
    OF THE UNFORCED RHYTHMS OF HIS GRACE
    AMIABLE IS MY LORD WHO SHALL
    SWEEP ME OFF MY FEET

    HE SHALL DRAW ME EVER SO CLOSE
    AND EMBRACE ME UNTO
    THE EXQUISITENESS OF HIS BOSOM
    AND BY HIS MIGHTY POWER
    HOLD ME THERE

    FOR HE SHALL PLACE MY HEAD FIRMLY
    NEAR HIS HEART THAT I MAY HEAR
    AND MY LIFE SING THE CHORUS
    OF THE INNERMOST RECESSES
    OF MY ALMIGHTY LORD

    This possesses the obvious structure and cadence of prayer. I gave it a slight tweak to showcase the more obvious strengths of the post and break up the bulky lineage into four strophes. You may use or disregard my suggestions as you see fit.

    All the best to yourself and the young Dulcinea.
    Bill.
    | Posted on 2006-06-10 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked how this poem itself dances to its own musical pattern.

    i love the expectancy, the hope and the faith displayed. there is confidence in the speakers tone. a confidence built on supernatural knowledge.

    my only regret is the all caps. at times, it can get in the way of the flow and can make it a bit troublesome to read. and quick nitpick here- there is a typo in the last line..."RECESSES IF(OF) HIS HEART"...

    overall its very refreshing to read a godly poem here on ES. its is very edifying to my soul and everyone knows that my soul right now needs it more than ever.

    please keep writing... i beseech you in the Lord.

    ~cynthia
    | Posted on 2006-06-05 00:00:00 | by Sacred Sindy | [ Reply to This ]


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