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    dots Submission Name: True Beautydots
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    Author: jennah
    ASL Info:    19/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    4.07 - 101/73/22
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    Description:
       I just spend a week in the Boundary Waters Canoe Area and the whole system just took my breath away. For those who've never been, it's a must.


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    dotsTrue Beautydots
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    Have you ever seen true beauty,
    the kind that does not come
    from any mortal hand,
    but from the rising sun
    on a pristine lake at dawn
    where the fog lies thick as glue
    and the mossy rocks stand tall
    amid the morning dew,
    and the ripples from the paddle
    spread quickly out of sight
    as a loon laughs wildly
    in the quickly fading night?




    Submitted on 2006-06-04 23:23:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Colten, honest, that's funny! lol! On a different note, I understand completely! It's sometimes only when you get away from home that God's beauty really shines through... try Vermont mountains!

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    orange
    | Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      I love how you made a single sentence into a lovely poem like this. The rhyme scheme works pretty well, and the message put across was efficiently put forth. Well done.

    P.S. I myself have seen beauty such as this. And it is truly breath-taking. Try the mountains of Colorado.

    In honest reply, Colten
    | Posted on 2006-06-06 00:00:00 | by Colten | [ Reply to This ]
      loved this work. its so raw, so real, so very inviting. as i read your work i myself felt as it were beauty cloke me. this poem is as fanciful as it is elegant. wonderful write.
    ~john-paul
    | Posted on 2006-06-06 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]


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