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    dots Submission Name: 3 Days In a Cagedots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 261
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 916
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1579



    Description:
       this is what happends to guys before they learn the lesson that women hold the weapon and men are powerless agaist it-it is that simple-we are basically squirrels looking for our next nut-and women own the farm!


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    dots3 Days In a Cagedots
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    3 Days In A Cage

    I am the man
    And I could have any woman
    Eating out of the palm of my hand
    Daddyís little girl into a whore
    They canít keep away
    They always want more
    So come get ya some
    It all starts with this silver tongue


    She was so mysterious
    I was more than curious
    She said Iíll show ya things that you never seen before,
    Once more Miss I fucking doubt it
    I know all about it
    She said weíll see
    Then I saw the swing
    hanging from the ceiling
    Before I could even blink my eyes
    there were guys
    in cages
    and chicks on the stages
    with poles of gold
    and they are not just for dancing anymore

    Leather and straps
    Chains and restraints
    She said to relax
    You wonít feel no pain
    Here just sit down
    I said No Iíll look around
    She said donít be stupid
    How do you use this?
    She said Oh itís easy and gave me a kiss
    Then she threw me down
    and went to insert this
    I said now look Miss
    I donít know how to put this
    But thatís not for me
    Sure it is baby
    I said itís getting kinda late
    And she lifted her skirt
    So leaving could wait
    Then she said it would really turn me on
    If ya got in the cage
    So I climbed in
    And she walked out
    Left me there for 3 whole days
    I am the man

    lamemansterms






    Submitted on 2006-06-05 06:00:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is a PIECE.

    all i can say is wow.

    what made you think of this?
    its flow is incredible and i agree with everyone else- put it to a meldoy.

    good write.
    | Posted on 2006-11-29 00:00:00 | by nipole | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a freaky lil twisted kind of piece......what to expect from the writer though! LOL!

    You always write such pieces that leave you sitting there like....WOW. No he didn't just have the boldness to say that.....but you do....and that is what I like about you and your style. You aren't afraid to touch basis on things that mostly are intimidating.....

    I commend you on that.

    Now.....I felt good rhythm in this one as well...I agree with twacky. It was melodic...easy to read and follow along with. I enjoyed reading this one for some sick reason! Maybe I have a tiny part of mental disturbance...and you bring it out of me!

    Great job! I'm always left impressed!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-06-12 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      "And she lifted her skirt
    So leaving could wait"

    Stellar. Wish i had more to say, but i'm typing real quiet...the 19 year old who kept me up all night is in the other room still sleeping.

    Love everything about this poem...sounds lyrical

    ...is it set to music?

    oh, anyway

    pleased to meet you
    later,
    kc
    | Posted on 2006-06-06 00:00:00 | by twacky | [ Reply to This ]
      Almost a song, almost a song.

    I wish I had some witty, interesting things to say about this, but this is just too good to try and be witty about. Favorites addition is all i can say!
    | Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by jer | [ Reply to This ]


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