Sign up to EliteSkills




Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password

Dream Guy


Author: nuttyginna
Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 24 /22 /12
Words: 127
Class/Type: Poetry /Romance
Total Views: 844
Average Vote:    3.0000
Bytes: 801



Description:


Errrr-yeah my friend just said dream guy called bill, so I wrote this to waste some time because the dinner queue is huge, so yeah...hope you like it!! :-)


Dream Guy



I fall right over,
Head over heels,
how embarrassing,
I quietly feel.
I then look up,
and see those eyes
hazel green,
they're smiling eyes.
His olive skin,
and gleaming teeth,
makes my heart,
skip a beat.
He helps me up,
and takes my hand,
we start to walk
along the sand.
The sun is setting,
below the sea,
my dream guy whispers
will you marry me?
My friends adore him
and I agree,
so I help him,
off his knee.
I kiss his cheek,
and smile inside,
my breath is taken,
I've just died.
That's how I feel,
I always will,
for my beautiful,
Darling Bill!




Submitted on 2006-06-05 07:07:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!




Comments


  i really like this enough said
| Posted on 2006-06-06 00:00:00 | by biffy2006 | [ Reply to This ]
  I really like this poem........It has alot of depth and the feelings are expressed clearly and descriptively. I like the imagery you used. it's a very good write, keep up the good work.
| Posted on 2006-06-05 00:00:00 | by chaos_bite | [ Reply to This ]


Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?



105997