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    dots Submission Name: The world has no fairness.dots
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    Author: BigDreams
    ASL Info:    17, female,Ontario Canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.38 - 32/27/18
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe world has no fairness.dots
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    One couple goes childless,
    One child goes hungry.

    One person; rich beyond belief,
    One country suffers deep poverty.

    One man lays in a hospital bed for a infected cut,
    One boy lays in the streets with multiple stab wounds.

    The world has no fairness. No equality.
    Only labels.
    The rich.
    The Poor




    Submitted on 2006-06-05 16:52:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thought it was deep and that it got the meaning across, a meaning that I think is very true. I liked the parrelisms(may have spelt that wrong) and the comparisons- they gave it deeper meaning, at least for me
    | Posted on 2007-12-29 00:00:00 | by ImperfectGirl1 | [ Reply to This ]
      few grammer mistakes need attention but enjoyed the right. In a dualistic world there does seem to be a lack of fairness. You got your point across really well. Some poignant thought provoking points in this piece that got my brain juices flowing.

    Kate
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    | Posted on 2006-06-05 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm...very poignant. Its true...but I personally think, the people themselves have made life 'no fair'.

    Take care

    D-Ink
    | Posted on 2006-06-06 00:00:00 | by D-Ink | [ Reply to This ]
      True but untrue...and yet still true
    The world seems to lack fairness sometimes...sometimes that is peoples own fault...but yet other times it can't be helped

    I would just slightly alter the line
    "One person is rich beyond belief"
    and change it to something more like
    "One person; rich beyond belief"
    But then again...that's just me :
    | Posted on 2006-06-07 00:00:00 | by AllyKatR | [ Reply to This ]


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