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    dots Submission Name: silencedots
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    Author: beth freese
    ASL Info:    18.F.Earth
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 74/113/39
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       i dunno. it is what it is i guess. im' not sure what that is yet. i guess a struggle to communicate. which i think i have...i can't manage to make my thoughts sound as smart as they are in my head or whatever. i dunno. maybe im just dumb. the person isn't really anyone in particular ...it's actually sorta a couple people i think. meh. i guess i should stop rambling and let you read it now. well thanks


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    Itís as if my voice just dissolves
    Thatís all it manages to do
    I will yell into the silence hopelessly
    And sometime you probably will too

    Itís similar to when blood comes out
    And turns red instead of blue
    My thoughts come out and turn
    Worthless as opposed to true

    We will all die off
    And Iíll never get to hear you
    We will be dust
    I only wondered if people knew

    Sometimes the wind blows
    Yesterday the birds flew
    Yesterday my thoughts grew
    Sometimes I wish I knew you

    Those birds go away with the wind
    Just like the thoughts that are new
    I stop wondering if youíll leave
    Cause I already have a clue

    And when you go
    My voice will yell never yell through
    The silence that we have
    So I guess this is good bye to you




    Submitted on 2006-06-05 19:02:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, I think this is really powerful. I can understand your inability to get the (right) words out. I've had that problem my whole life! usually the wrong ones come out before the right ones. I think this is very well written and conveys your confusion and difficulty with trying to communicate your feelings. nice write.
    | Posted on 2006-06-06 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]


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