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    dots Submission Name: Waitingdots
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    Author: skittls
    Elite Ratio:    0.88 - 6/5/9
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsWaitingdots
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    I've been lookin for someone special, but no one has every came around. I have been waiting and waiting for you, but i just keep hearing a sound.

    I dont want to know what it is saying, but then maybe i do. I was thinking maybe just maybe, that sound could be you.

    It's trying to tell me something, because it cant get through my head, maybe i think ill lay down and maybe even go to bed.

    Why should i keep waiting, for someone who hasnt came. I will just go back to my old days and have everything else the same.




    Submitted on 2006-06-05 22:10:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hm..this piece was nice, the flow/rhyming made it kind of playful, I liked that. And in the last part, it should have been "come" and not "came" but then it wouldn't have rhymed, so eh, who cares, lol. But if your waiting for someone, and then they get there, and you ignore them, whats with that? You need to take a chance, and get with that person, be with them, and see what the future holds them. Change is nice, but then again everything being the same is safe, safe is good. Anywho, great piece, I liked it, take care, night night!

    Lucy
    | Posted on 2006-06-12 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ]


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