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    dots Submission Name: Words of Severancedots
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    Author: Aknahlij_d 1
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Loueezy
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 369/516/136
    Words: 492
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Being a Teen
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    dotsWords of Severancedots
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    i can't tell you how many times i've relived this
    and never pressed rewind once
    its that i'm punch drunk, or not drunk at all
    is it because i never show you my balls
    strangle, and pitch your ass against the fucking wall
    i'm fighting to get a few words out like we were still just messing
    all but jokes now, this is my solemn confession
    this is the lesson the teachers never force fed me
    you never sprung for love, and i was never taken for meat
    never mistaken for a bitch,
    never a pussy till you and my dad took sides
    you both made this
    so soft=spoken and hardly a word uttered
    since i know you know better, and know i never stutter
    i'm usually articulate but words are something lost
    among the revenue of love, and how high of a cost it has
    i put on my school bad, and look real sad
    so you could play bully, and make me discontent with what i have
    without saying a word
    see most girls lay it on,
    i guess i should be thankful
    if only you weren't dead wrong
    i feel as if i'm a child trapped in a sexy exterior
    a aggrivating little twat for you to comb over
    i sense nothing but fear
    i can smeel the scent of care but its nowhere to be found
    i gotta look up and knee to know what's goin down
    you never spoke a word, and expect to know
    the rule of hand is that you don't applaud no-shows
    you can't expect to be the metal of your liking
    when i been fighting and fucked up,
    just to get some punch-drunk...

    i'm planning to keep it at a low
    the next time i speak,
    i'll be descrete, and pick out words that you know
    how many time can i say i'm srry for nuthin,
    i used to come to you for comfort, and NOW i get nothing?
    you must e up to something, some sort of trick to see if i'll stay
    or maybe you're just confused, pushin me away
    i feel as though i've done wrong through my parents
    some song stuck in my head, well at least the first thrity seconds
    know that i care, crying once for the spur of the moment
    when i'm catching the edge, and crying everytime the opportunity's open
    and i'm choking on the words to throw at you to make you comprehend how much this has been a rip and a mend
    see you never had a chance to play the man and get a stronghold
    everybody else asks me for limbo, to see how low i go
    and i sink in this metal seat, embelishing on
    about how my latest ex never listens to whole songs
    and manages to sing along,
    she doesn't sing for me
    she vomits in a pail, and brings in to me gritting her teeth




    Submitted on 2006-06-05 22:15:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm confused. Is the major problem your gf or your parents? Please explain. Either way, you know I'm here for you. You're in my prayers. Ttys. Luvs babe.
    Hannah
    | Posted on 2006-06-06 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      i put on my school bad, and look real sad
    so you could play bully, and make me discontent with what i have

    i'm fighting to get a few words out like we were still just messing
    all but jokes now, this is my solemn confession

    those lines were ill as [censored]. u know this is gonna be one of my faves right? well now u know. i can tell ur going through [censored] with ur girl or at least u were. but are u beefing with ur parents too or are they only related to this indirectly? ur gonna have to break it down for me
    | Posted on 2006-06-06 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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