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    dots Submission Name: Sky Canvasdots

    Author: smartblond
    ASL Info:    18/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 97/114/33
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 1229
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1094

       I love watching sunsets and i was thing how many ways you could describe them and how long this poem could have been if I used all of them.

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    dotsSky Canvasdots


    The globe of stunning light
    Must say to us goodnight
    For the world is ever turning
    So that others that are yearning
    May see this ever burning ball of fire
    Of this they all require
    To know the start of every new day

    But before it must go
    it gives to us a gorgeous show
    That shines a remarkable glow
    A multicolored painting
    That is temporarily remaining
    Covering the sky in beauty
    Heaven's painter does his duty

    The colors are perfect and pure
    That nothing can begin to obscure
    Clouds pass over
    the beauty just shines moreover
    Fluffy and silver lined they pass by
    As they move slowly across the sky

    Lower and lower it starts to disappear
    And the colors start to smear
    Till only a sliver is left

    As darkness invades
    The colors all fade
    The stars come out to play
    And the moon is there to stay
    Until the dawn of the next day

    Submitted on 2006-06-06 11:23:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was so beautiful. Man, I really wish I could write like this. You described everything so beautifully, and you used all the right words so that I could have this gorgous image in my head. This is definitely making it's way into my favorites.

    Excellent work. I cannot believe I missed this one after visiting your page so many times before. But it's good I saw it now.

    | Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, beautiful description, put me right there in the middle of this sunset, and I know what you mean....one of those times every so often where time almost stays still while your watching nightfall and the sunsets a play of shadow and light that couldn't exist without the other, and then you know that it's ok to lose yourself in that moment, until the next one. great job and thnx so much for sharing, a definate fave hun,
    keep writing, I"ll be looking forward to reading sum new ones from you
    | Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, I love the sun. I love every play of light. I could live a life just staring at it, wondering wishing dreaming and losing myself to the very core of our life. I think the poem catches that spirit which I feel every time I stand and watch. Im so glad you mentioned it. It reminds me of the past month when me and friends made it a point to watch sunsets beneath a vine covered roof and pink flowers that glowed against the backdrop of blue as the sun displayed its glory on another corner far off yet mesmering. I ramble too much.
    Take care.
    | Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by fiery whisper | [ Reply to This ]
      So, Dave don't like booty? let's see, how about

    "Covering the sky in beauty
    Heaven's painter does his duty"

    hehehe just a thought. Nice little descriptive poem, on a great subject.

    I liked your rhymes, and especially the way you slowed it right down at the finish.

    neat poem

    be happy

    | Posted on 2006-06-06 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      NIce poetic description! I liked all of it, well, all but the one line that ended with booty. But there arent very many words that go well with beauty. Hmmm...

    Sunsets are the coolest part of the day.
    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2006-06-06 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]

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