Sound Of My Heart

Author: BigDreams ASL Info:    17, female,Ontario Canada Elite Ratio:    2.38 - 32 /27 /18 Words: 50

Class/Type: Poetry /Nature Total Views: 1385 Average Vote:    4.0000 Bytes: 362

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Sound Of My Heart

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The Wind, Chasing us across the valley. The Sun, Smiling down at horse and human. His Eyes, Full of spirit and freedom. His Mane, Dancing around my peaceful face. My Body, Hold on for dear life. My Heart, Matching the beat of is pounding hooves.

Submitted on 2006-06-06 15:13:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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No need to use any other word, it works as: Dancing around my face.Maybe, Dancing 'round my face. This may fit better with the following line:Hold on...... If not maybe change the line: Hold on for dear life. Nice use of space. Nice poem. bye

| Posted on 2006-06-20 00:00:00 | by going_strong | [ Reply to This ]

i liked this i have a rescue horse that im taking care of and training so i can relate to what your saying in it and i liked it a lot. great work.

| Posted on 2006-07-22 00:00:00 | by gothfreak | [ Reply to This ]

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