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    dots Submission Name: Passion of lovedots

    Author: totojane03
    ASL Info:    25- colorado springs
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 151/77/35
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       I found a love that is so true and have never felt this way before.It is true love!

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    dotsPassion of lovedots

    I have a strong feeling in my heart,
    Tied in knots never to part,
    It is a feeling of love that I can't explain,
    Just hearing his voice makes me go in sain,
    It's a mixed emotion that is helping me let go of all my pain,
    And regrets from roads I shouldn't have been on,
    Though I am blessed to say,
    All my hopes, dreams and prayer lead me stray from that road of dispare,
    Leading me to find you there,
    And with someone who truly cares,
    No one has ever respected me,and my body,
    And wanting it to turn in to everlasting love,
    So many nights I wished upon a star,
    Hoping I'd find such true love,
    And now in my sight there you are,
    Walking by myside,
    Wanting to marrie me and make it last forever and all times,
    I'm not sure what will be,
    But I know for sure within the deepness of my heart you truly love me,
    Other wise you would not follow your heart to respect my body, untill the very day that
    you marrie me.

    Submitted on 2006-06-06 17:22:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Everyone loves love.
    Everyone wants love,
    And I like how this poem shows how great love is. I wish I had someone to love, but someday I will. Everyone deserves someone like this, no matter what they've done. After all, there's always someone out there that is your one, the one that makes you feel complete. Sometimes you get mistaken and find out that he/she really wasn't that person, and end up hurt. But at the end of the day you should truely know that it is possible to find that person.

    Lovely write.


    P.S. I type mine up on microsoft processor first to get rid of all errors, maybe you should try that. :] Your poems are lovely, and they should not be underestimated by some of the spelling errors.
    | Posted on 2009-08-25 00:00:00 | by smexybabe0101 | [ Reply to This ]
      thanks anyways sorry you dont like it but I know other writers that do. -totojane03-

    G unit jeanne was complaining of your spelling, too. Back on 6/07/2006. You keep saying, when you get around to it.... why not fix at least ONE and have it look right? It's not "purrr-fect" we're going for, it's an illusion of "educated" and not "stupid as a rock & doesn't give a [censored]".

    Guess I'm not the only one.

    Please, for the love of god, FIX your errors!
    | Posted on 2009-08-24 00:00:00 | by therealmojymo | [ Reply to This ]
      ow that's really good keep writing...i mean seriously good!!
    | Posted on 2009-08-24 00:00:00 | by vannamay | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this poem some of the feeling you have in it reminds me of what i'm going through i just haven't gotten my guy yet. but this is really good. joanna
    | Posted on 2006-06-06 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]
      you have..alot of spelling errors...how old are you?
    | Posted on 2006-06-07 00:00:00 | by G unit jeanne | [ Reply to This ]

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