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    dots Submission Name: I got kicked by a cow (true story)dots
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    Author: skittls
    Elite Ratio:    0.88 - 6/5/9
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Story/Comedy
    Total Views: 730
    Average Vote:    2.0000
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       Lets just make the long story short. I GOT KICKED BY A COW!!


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    dotsI got kicked by a cow (true story)dots
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    This is a 100% true story.. you kno how i no?? it happend to me!

    Last year I was at the fair, and I went on a ton of rides. I was just about to go over to Mcdonalds across the street. My brother just had to go and see the petting zoo. This really weird guy told us that the animals were by the barn. So i went all the way over there by the barn and there were cows, so i decided well if its a petting zoo why not pet it. My mom was telling me not to pet the cow because it looks mean and it will kick you. Well i dont believe my mom because she normally jokes around..I mean what kind of cow kicks someone??? Well this cow was really mean because what do i go and do?? pet the cow!! I ended up getting kicked by it 2 times and went to the hospital for 1 1/2 days!!! Dont pet the cows that you are not fammiliar with!!!!!!!!!!




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      .....Well, it was humorous in kind of a sad way. I mean, don't get me wrong, I thought it was a humorous story, but you could have done so much more with it.
    First, you used many trite expressions. Your punctuation and grammar was incorrect too.
    Like I said previously, your story was humorous, but so much more could have been done with with it. You could have vividly discribed your surroundings, and added colorful adjectives to keep the reader intrigued throughout the piece.
    overall, it wasn't very well written, but had the means of an interesting and hilarious story. Don't give up, I can see that you have the potential to be a great writer!
    | Posted on 2006-06-07 00:00:00 | by Olala_Rachie | [ Reply to This ]
      ...and the moral of the story is...listen to your mother when she tells you to 'not pet a cow'. It might seem like strange advice but what pain and misery it would have spared you. But hey it's a story and great writers use what they know. So use it and stay funny. The ability to laugh at one's self is so important for your art! Keep it up. Someone who go kicked by a cow deserves to get stalked and I'm SO gonna stalk you!
    | Posted on 2006-06-07 00:00:00 | by dazed_confused | [ Reply to This ]


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