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    dots Submission Name: The worst way to Diedots
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    Author: brokensmile
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    Watery graves
    My intentions have floating tombstones
    I can see myself in the rippling water
    so cold and clean
    As hard as glass
    Those rocks were just as sharp
    as the voice pounding behind your silent wishes.

    Drowning alive
    When our thoughts briefly touched
    The ocean had me catch something inhuman
    In the way your eyes lost their starry depth
    Stripped of life and the desire to pull me in
    All wet and ragged
    Gasping for breath
    You left me in the dark kissing solid ground
    Listening to the last seconds of night
    While you were gone past the trees
    On the road to apathy.




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